Ponbiki:
Liking the harsh textured blacks to start with.
The scene where Dolly is tiktak-ing away at her uber-computer is bright and colourful and completely interrupts the mood. I know it's a good way to draw attention to the event, but it could be smoothed out into the comic better by having those same colours appear around Estrella and Captain Ponbiki before they are yoinked to that alternate reality. And you certainly should have had it on page 11 when we see her tikking away at the computer.
The story itself is much darker then one would expect of such fluffy and disney-esque characters. On page 12 I think you put far too many panels into Estrella picking up the girder, which could have been used in more economic ways.
Your action tends to be confusing, with it a bit unclear what exactly happened (for example, the events on page 13, but I do like the last panel on Page 14 which is awesome.
It's unclear who's who in the14th page, and I think switching the alignment would have much improved that.
The focus you've put into your opponents characters is brilliant, you rarely see people who will let their own characters take a back seat and for that I salute you.
A good comic, but I think you can and will do better in the future.
Thresher
Nutty the Squirrel and Dolly Dandellion vs. Estrella D' Muerte and Kaisho Ponbiki
Critiques & Comments
# 19
Posted:
Dec 16 2010, 05:48 PM
# 18
Posted:
Dec 16 2010, 05:48 PM
Jackster:
I loved the xmas tale themed story, and your dialogue is tight.
Except for page 4. The flow is unclear and I can't tell what order the panels go in and the dialogue there doesn't help.
Your monotone work is pretty slick, it's clear and easy to determine what's what.
Love the Zombies at xmas.
Every holiday needs zombies.
The easter egg hunt alone would get much more interesting.
A good work that kept me thoroughly entertained C:
Thresher
I loved the xmas tale themed story, and your dialogue is tight.
Except for page 4. The flow is unclear and I can't tell what order the panels go in and the dialogue there doesn't help.
Your monotone work is pretty slick, it's clear and easy to determine what's what.
Love the Zombies at xmas.
Every holiday needs zombies.
The easter egg hunt alone would get much more interesting.
A good work that kept me thoroughly entertained C:
Thresher
# 17
Posted:
Dec 14 2010, 02:35 PM
Awesome!
# 16
Posted:
Dec 13 2010, 09:41 PM
Floored, I have no idea which way to lean here...both comics were absolutely wonderful
Jackster, I absolutely am in love with the Christmas story idea for this one. The rhyme scheme was great and the humor was excellent, I also thought the story progression and panel transition was excellent
Ponbiki, I loved everything about this comic, the art style, the action was superb and the story was really intense, in my amateur opinion I can't say anything bad about either of these and it's going to be a very difficult vote as I'm sure most people will agree to that.
Jackster, I absolutely am in love with the Christmas story idea for this one. The rhyme scheme was great and the humor was excellent, I also thought the story progression and panel transition was excellent
Ponbiki, I loved everything about this comic, the art style, the action was superb and the story was really intense, in my amateur opinion I can't say anything bad about either of these and it's going to be a very difficult vote as I'm sure most people will agree to that.
# 15
Posted:
Dec 12 2010, 01:26 PM
Very tight matchup, and I am sure it will come down to just a few points.
Jackster- Highly creative as usual, I didnt laugh as hard as I did on previouse rounds..(the ninja dolly was just frickin hilariouse) But it was still lotsa fun.
Pon- your battle was a little more abstract but still very cool. I had to read it a couple of times to really follow it. You drew Dolly and Nutty well.
Awesome art from both of you.
Jackster- Highly creative as usual, I didnt laugh as hard as I did on previouse rounds..(the ninja dolly was just frickin hilariouse) But it was still lotsa fun.
Pon- your battle was a little more abstract but still very cool. I had to read it a couple of times to really follow it. You drew Dolly and Nutty well.
Awesome art from both of you.
# 14
Posted:
Dec 12 2010, 06:46 AM
Wonderful
# 13
Posted:
Dec 11 2010, 11:36 PM
Fuck, this is just a tie for me. What great comics you guys pulled.
# 12
Posted:
Dec 11 2010, 04:34 PM
Jesus, this was amazing.
# 11
Posted:
Dec 11 2010, 01:47 PM
Man both of these were awesome, and yay cameos : D. I'll comment more when I have more time!
# 10
Posted:
Dec 11 2010, 01:05 PM
beautiful work both of you! loved your story ponbiki. purely enjoyable. and jackster your story is extremely amusing. thank you both!
# 9
Posted:
Dec 11 2010, 12:43 PM
these were both awesome!!!!...i have nothing else to say
# 8
Posted:
Dec 10 2010, 09:26 AM
Man, this is going to intense, I know it.
# 7
Posted:
Dec 9 2010, 05:56 PM
pages uploaded. (wipes sweat off forehead).
# 6
Posted:
Nov 27 2010, 07:20 AM
Good luck guys! No idea how this will turn out
# 5
Posted:
Nov 27 2010, 05:25 AM
Whoa. This is a SWEET match-up!!!
# 4
Posted:
Nov 27 2010, 02:31 AM
Noooooooooooooooooooooooooo fukk you guys!
Good luck.
Good luck.
# 3
Posted:
Nov 27 2010, 12:15 AM
oh my GOD. SEMI-FINALS MADNESS!
# 2
Posted:
Nov 27 2010, 12:14 AM
Congrats on movin' on up! Keep it together and make it great!
# 1
Posted:
Nov 27 2010, 12:11 AM
Good luck you guys! Make it epic
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