The White Dwarf and Drednaut vs. Portobello! and Johnny Gord

The White Dwarf and Drednaut vs. Portobello! and Johnny Gord

by drawdan

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Icon for The White DwarfIcon for Drednaut53.1%
575 points
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by HAVEN!

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Icon for Portobello!Icon for Johnny Gord46.9%
508 points
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Thresher
Artist
166 comments
# 15   Posted: Dec 16 2010, 07:04 PM
Haven:
This is a good quality comic, but far far too short.
The dialogue can certainly be tightened, especially with the ships computers.

beyond that there's just not enough to leave you satisfied.

Thresher

Thresher
Artist
166 comments
# 14   Posted: Dec 16 2010, 06:58 PM
Drawdan:
You are obviously a fan of superhero comic books, I can tell from the massive guys and all the flying these guys are doing! The recap at the start is also a hint, but it does help as I'm coming into this round fresh.

I like how your bullets are piercing the black borders, may nab that for myself.

On page 6, one of the panel borders hasn't been completely filled in, which make sit look incomplete.

Your dialogue is pretty tight, and so is your pencils. However, you seem to draw women really sticky, I know Arena's quite long but her student was also quite stretched.  Most of your characters seem to have a defalut expression of "smirk" too.

I also personally feel it's a bit of a cop out to have only one page for your opponents, and feel that you could have spent more of those 8 pages showcasing them.

Some good quality work though, especially with the pencils.

Thresher

Wolcik
Artist
492 comments
# 13   Posted: Dec 14 2010, 04:34 AM
haven:
It's awesome to see it all in colors. I don't get why White Dwarf is in bear form, but I'm guessing you felt like bear drawning - I had that in my armageddon take XD This story feels like it has no conclusion as if you god bored with the idea of characters interacting.

Drawdan:
It's awesome to see you use preview page. It be even more stylish and finished if each paragraph had a picture - you could make a colored one and just use it each time you do battle (like for each section of info on FBI and such) and give it a more complete feel by sorting it into a frame of some sort.
You could try to draw people with open mouths when they talk sometimes - try to capture the best moment of the scene as if it was a screenshot from a movie.
I can see you started dividing your dialoques into more bubbles and it helps, but you also should leave some more space between boarders of ballons and actual text to make it easier for the eye and less tireing.

Charlie
Artist
731 comments
# 12   Posted: Dec 11 2010, 01:55 PM
Wow really nice artwork in both this time around!

exsidus
24 comments
# 11   Posted: Dec 11 2010, 12:30 PM
Awesome job you two.Drawdan, i liked the line work and shading in yours, very nice flow and build up as well, can't wait for the fight at the end now. Nice color in yours haven, i wish it was a little longer but besides that everything looked pretty good

E.W. Schneider
Artist
1070 comments
# 10   Posted: Dec 10 2010, 09:25 AM
I'm excited to see what you guys have in store for us.

drawdan
Artist
321 comments
# 9   Posted: Nov 29 2010, 08:09 AM
no worries..Ive got a script and have already finished a couple of pages!

HAVEN!
Artist
51 comments
# 8   Posted: Nov 28 2010, 11:30 AM
yeah dan, i dont want to see that planet ANY more lol

E.W. Schneider
Artist
1070 comments
# 7   Posted: Nov 28 2010, 09:42 AM
Drawdan: RRRRRRRRR!!!! What is it with me getting paired against characters that are in space!!!! Back to the ol' drawing board.
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Don't you sacrifice your story by stretching yourself all over the place, man. You don't have to include haven's plot into your own. Think about your own narrative!

drawdan
Artist
321 comments
# 6   Posted: Nov 28 2010, 07:38 AM
RRRRRRRRR!!!! What is it with me getting paired against characters that are in space!!!! Back to the ol' drawing board.

HAVEN!
Artist
51 comments
# 5   Posted: Nov 27 2010, 10:43 AM
oh my

Rtv!
Artist
603 comments
# 4   Posted: Nov 27 2010, 09:59 AM
This matchup just sucks cuz it's TOO COOL. o_o

Angie
Council
1937 comments
# 3   Posted: Nov 27 2010, 07:21 AM
Good luck both of you!

E.W. Schneider
Artist
1070 comments
# 2   Posted: Nov 27 2010, 12:16 AM
This is so evenly matched up I am going to Semi-Finaling EXPLODE.

Charlie
Artist
731 comments
# 1   Posted: Nov 27 2010, 12:12 AM
Sweet, this matchup should be pretty good.

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