A rematch could be pretty neat! :3!

Yes you\'ve read right.  That Character might have to be postponed, but I still plan on getting her in. :>

Thanks Diascope! Maybe we can rematch sometime
plus, I read on your LJ that you maybe getting a new character into VOID...hmmm? >:3

Grats\' on the win Dimension.

Thanks RabbitRabbit! and glad you liked the cameo :3

Dia: That was actually really cute!  I found myself liking the artwork when it\'s not usually a style that tickles me.  x3  I\'d like to see it fleshed out a bit more, though - the thin, crackly lines work better for some things than others, you could contrast them with more of the darker strokes you used to make Marreck pop out on Page 3.  

Dim: The colors were really gorgeous, and you\'ve got a good sense of design.  But yeah, like angie said, the bodies are a bit stiff.  Also, work on your framing, think of the panels like camera angles in a movie.  A lot of the time, I\'m not sure which figure is supposed to be the focus of attention.  Other than that, it was an awfully swell battle.  And TANUKY CAMEOOOO <3  

My vote goes to Dimension for more fleshed-out artwork, but you both did a nice job.  

I\'ll have to go with text from now on then. My handwriting just can\'t be read, haha. :B Same for consistency, along with other things. I\'ll be sure to work on that next time. :> Thanks for taking the time to critique guys.

@Luniara:  The movement looks stiff, huh? Alrighty then, I\'ll see what I can do to make it look less stiff and I think I will choose \"letter O matic\" instead of \"manga temple\" as the font for my next comic. Thank you very much! :3

Very good submissions, both room for improvement.

Diascope: Your first few pages were looking good there, but I noticed they were getting sloppy after some time. Your ink wash is all good, but I think you use it too excessively and rely too much on it for your backgrounds. I would add in more details and effort into that. (your wonky bricks, and ppl standing in thin air is just sloppy!). Work on different angles next time, and a bit on your anatomy. Maybe a tiny more contrast in your panels as well with a bit of line width variation. Good submission though!

Dimension: Great coloring, but I think the comic relies too much on it. The movement was really stiff throughout the whole comic. Things just end up really confusing, so try to watch that in your panels. I\'d make a better choice in fonts. That is rather a pet peeve of mine. The lettering kind of goes into the border of the bubble, making it hard to read. By keeping the text with a bit of margin, the readers eyes are drawn more to read it comfortably. Try going to Blambot.com. I tend to use \"letter O matic\" every now and again for my font of choice. Very lovely though. I won\'t say to much things that have been repeated- so that\'s about it.

Good work and Good luck to the both of you for the match.

@JoshuaEliGilley: thank ya! I\'ll work on what you have mentioned. :3

Dimension:

Colors were nice, story was ok. Work on anatomy and face consistency at different angles. when the glasses fly past eden on the last page, I think less lines that follow the flight arc of the glasses would be better.

Diascope:

Your first couple pages were rockin, but then progressively they got sloppy and at times illegible.  I was more entertained by your story. More exciting \"shots\" but don\'t skimp on those crowd scenes, makes things confusing.

It\'s an easy mistake to make, just keep practicing!

@angieness: thanks! Yeah,  I made the mistake of making the inks on the inside of the figure thicker than the outline of the figure. Errrg, anatomy I\'ll keep working on it and actually look at my anatomy books more often. As for the font, I\'ll just go back to using the one I was using before.

@kuro: I didn\'t really creat a vanishing point for the those angles so that may have been my problem XD I\'ll be sure to try and make them make more sence next time. Thank you!

I wasn\'t relying on the arrows, it was just in case. Certain layouts confuse me, while other people seem to understand quite easily. -.-

diascope- i don\'t know whether it was something about the inking or scanning but it seemed pretty light in some places & the ink wash bits seemed a little haphazard as i didn\'t know what they were actually supposed to be shading. thicker line work would help, as would more complete backgrounds. also, work on your layouts. if you have to rely on arrows to tell a reader the order, you\'re not doing it right.

dimension- a lot of improvement. nice work. keep working on your perspective, it was off in a few spots like the bird\'s-eye views, the sidewalks as though they were sitting on a separate plane than the bench, you know? they should both have pointed toward the same vanishing point. and i agree with angie on the font choices. maybe even a kerning thing. kerning is how tight the letters are to one another. if they were spaced a little more it might have worked better. but judging by the progress i\'ve seen in your stuff, it looks like you\'re on the up & up. so keep it going!

-J

Diascope-Glad to see another finished submission from you! You need to spend more time on your stuff though! You could really push that toning far and devote more time to your lines and your stuff will really pop. I like your style, but you need to put more effort into it. Your backgrounds especially need more work. You had a nice variety of angles and while the story was very simple, it worked.

Dimension-looks wise this is an improvement from your previous battle! You really need to spend more time on your lineart though, as colors can only do so much to hide stuff. I\'m glad to see you had more variation in angles this time around, but try to make them make a little more sense. Like the bottom of page 3 the angle made what was happening a little confusing.  Also be careful with your choice of font, I found it difficult to read at first. It looks like you\'re also still having some anatomy issues going on. It looks like your torsos are pretty long in some areas and the arms are still looking off.

@Diascope: Well, I know I told you over IM what I thought about this, but dang let me just say this again: you made Seak look sooo coool D,:> And even though you didn’t get to color this, I still think you deserve to win this :3 the black marker just looks awesome. Also your story was like a hundred times better than mine XD
Some panels did confuse me though, but not by a lot.
Thanks again for battling me! :3

And I’m sorry to everyone for the half-assed backgrounds on my side, I apparently should have planned them out better D;

Submitted

I apologize in advance for the butt quality of the last page, I lost my eraser, so I tried erasing with the end of an old mechanical pencil and it ended up putting random black spots everywhere. That and my black marker decided it wanted to be difficult. Mannn. Shoulda gone digital. D:

awww, don\'t worry about it Diascope :3 I\'m sure I\'ll be happy to see what you\'ll post

Ahah, It\'s alright. Sadly I won\'t be able to do these in color. I\'d rather spend more time making the inks nice then adding quick sloppy color and ruining it when I get short on time. (which I indeed DID end up short on time. )    


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My pages have been uploaded :3

Oh and Diascope, sorry if I made Marreck\'s hair too long/spikey... 8B

*Hyperventilates*  I seriously can’t wait. This will rock many socks. XD

Do good, you guys!  8D

HELL YES

Same here. Lets make this one good. BD

like Oh Em Geeee! 8D

I\'m gonna try my best to have my side of the battle in full color, good luck Diascope and thanks again. I can\'t wait for this